Well, it started okay. The idea was very creative, and it was written so that you could see what was happening. You can tell that whats going on isn't right, and the people are too confused all the time to notice it. It gets confusing for the reader though, when it mentions a boy being seven feet tall and having to wear metal (is that right?) over 300 pounds of it? It seems impossible, even in the far future. And the noises, yes loud noises can be flustering, but not enough to totally forget your train of thought and what your doing. Especially not that your teenage son just went insane on TV and was shot and killed publicly.
Also, it didn't elaborate on somethings like how they managed to make everyone equal. Did everyone wear masks like the ballerinas? Did everyone wear voice modifiers? Did they rebuild the city so every house is the same? Also, writing a story where everyone is supposed to be the same, what is there to define a character? You can't say, "oh he's the smart one with messy hair" if no one is really aloud to be "smart" or have something someone could make a competition. It just confuses me.
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